A story I'm working on

Well, for the last while, writing for me has just been work. Reporting, losing my muse, etc...
I decided to try and get it back into a hobby by working on a story.

I've got no name for it so far, and I'm only around 1000 words in, but I really like it so far.
I was wondering what you guys thought of it?

If you could, please read through it and let me know any thoughts you have.

You can download it here.

Thanks

Tags: short, short story, story, wip, work in progress, working on

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Permalink Reply by Rex Torres on March 22, 2009 at 8:24pm: I looked at your story. Aside from a short edit/rewrite, it looks alright. Just re-read it and check your grammar.

I guess it's about a guy who pulls a joke on a friend and makes him feel like he got arrested and is being interrogated by a detective?

Are you writing this for yourself, or is this for school?

Good luck with that!

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Permalink Reply by Condawg on March 22, 2009 at 8:30pm: Well, there is going to be much more to it than that, but so far, that's the gist of it. Not a joke as much as an experiment.

I'm just writing it for myself.

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Permalink Reply by Cookenstein on March 22, 2009 at 9:24pm: Is this based upon real life or fiction?; ▶ Reply to This

Permalink Reply by Condawg on March 23, 2009 at 2:44am: Purely fictional.; ▶ Reply to This

Permalink Reply by Rafael Apolinario on March 22, 2009 at 11:58pm: I'm also writing something like that, though it has been four months now since I started I'm still at chapter 3 for my story. Lazy me.

I have also read it and like, Rex Torres said, aside from a bit editing looks alright already. The first part catch my attention.
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Permalink Reply by Condawg on March 23, 2009 at 7:33pm: Haha. It happens.
I'm still about as far as I was... I keep going in and making revisions without really adding new content. It keeps me at a somewhat improved standstill.

Yeah, I need to edit some stuff... I'm running any revisions I've got through a few people whenever they're available. It's shaping up.
And yeah, I tried to be really descriptive in the beginning to catch the reader's attention, before descending into reality.
This story actually started out as an exercise for me to find my muse; write a few inspirational, descriptive sentences. Erase them. Rinse, repeat.
I ended up enjoying the first thing I came up with and stuck with it... Expanded, added a twist, etc.

Anyway, thanks for checking it out. I appreciate it.; ▶ Reply to This